Under the mauve sheet layered intricately,
The hearts painted with raging blood,
From the tale of Romeo Juliet to till now,
All those died cause of love.
Those pompous pillers, and stairways,
Hearts Serenading the rosy apparition.
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Entangled, espoused were gallant bloods,
Treaded the roads of desert for the
Ocean of love.
Lively-history and silentious numbers,
Bards of past still ponder.
Why The gold rusted and
Why the diamond burnt?
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It stood in magnificent fane,
Calling out for the hand of sane ,
Lies underneath all the brave,
Some stood at outskirts,
Thinking ’bout the foolish pace.
Forgetting; time is the master of all Fates.
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There were neither fane nor minerats,
As long as I digest the universe’s tale.
The cosmos around is bewildering
Shaking, vituperating us.
Alas we died at its fate,
Devouring all the pains and trials.
Arise, come to the shore,
On the land locked by no ocean
Only sea with salt and grains.
Aquib.
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Fate can change the whole story… Sad reality in a beautiful poetry
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Yeah. Obviously.
Determination and chasing dreams also a part of it. Thanks for your lovely feedback and encouragement. Best wishes. 😀😀.
Your latest poem is superb too, a poetic delight. Hope to read more from you.
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Thank you so much… wishes for you too..
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Entangled, espoused were gallant bloods,
Treaded the roads of desert for the
Ocean of love.
Love is too vast to be expressed in few words,but you did it❤
It’s sad yet beautiful 👌👌👌
Loved it!!!
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Thanks Yasmin, for your wonderful remarks.
Love is intricate,
I think it should be viewed from :the other side’ of it. Keep smiling.
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A sadly engrossing poem Aquib, and these words are superb,
“Forgetting; time is the master of all Fates.”
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Thanks Ivor for appreciating it. Much humbled.
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Always my pleasure ☺️
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😊😊
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“Heart painted with raging blood, from the tale of Romeo Juliet & all those who died for love” expression is so sad, but a beautiful writeup indeed
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Thanks oj. It’s kind of good sad I think.😁😁.
Best wishes for you.
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Lol…but good. Best wishes to u too
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😊😊
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‘Desert for the ocean of love’ – So thoughtful.❤️
Only sea with salt and grains – stood out brightly.
There’s so much to love, than the worldly desires, no one can conquer the love Allah has for all of us.🌼
Kahin suna tha, hath ki lakiron mei jo likha use sirf dua badal sakti hai.🤗
Beautiful poem, though sad but reality is a must and we know this will only be here, after this if our deeds are right everything will be great in heaven.🌼
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That’s what I wanted to portray, real love is when, when you put blinkers on and move forward, alluding and being pompous and masquerading won’t serve the purpose.
And you said it beautifully.
Thanks for appreciating it Shakira, aka female rajnikant. 😝😝😝, aha but don’t kill me. 😂😂.
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😂😂😂 not killing it BRO.😂 this was good poetry..finally😛
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Tumse seekh rahe baji, likhti raho. Taqi hum padhte rahe aur inspire hote rahe. 😊😊
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Arey yeh toh appka badappan hai.😀
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Dil Toh baccha hain jee. Lol
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😂😂😂😂 bhai sewak haan😛
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😂😂😂😂 bhai sewaiyaan😛
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Bhai na bhai toh fikar na, oo ganpat chal paani la.
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😂 Paani nahi sewaiyaan😂
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Paani ni peena hian. Sewaiyaan, sawariya sab available kuch bhi demand Karo.
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Sirf sewaiyaan.. no sawariya😂
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That’s beautiful bro. Sweet and sad
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Thank you dear sister, 🤗🤗..
Always my pleasure to hear from you. Best wishes for you. Keep smiling.
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Thank you, you too
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Wonderfully profound the words meant so much!
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Thanks Malkie for appreciating it with your kind words. Best wishes.
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So lovely it is
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Thanks a lot Mistimaan bhai
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Good poem. Love the way you ended this
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Thenks Drew, much humbled by your encouraging remark.
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‘Why The gold rusted and
Why the diamond burnt?’
❤️❤️
There are so many things I love about this poem. The love, the pain, the fate and the hope, you have churned all of it together so proficiently to yield this amazing piece of poetry. You’re brilliant, Aquib! 🌸🤗🌸
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Oh my God,.
I stole some of your thoughts @poemsinacoffer.😎😎😎
Thanks for this wonderful remark of yours . I am actually overwhelmed.
God bless you.
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Haha…very funny! 😂😂
It was really a nice piece and I truly enjoyed the read. 🤗🌸
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😂, thanks it’s always my pleasure to hear from you. Keep smiling. 😊😊
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🌸🤗🌸
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💐💐
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Time is indeed the master of all fate, that line is so powerful and such a defining verse for “A Poem”. That title is even strong. Line after line, time kept on slipping and it seemed inevitable and such emotion went with it. And the ending was so strong that it left dwindling feelings that played the emotions so well. Aquib, you have really climbed so high emotionally, this was amazing my friend and your wording was phenomenal. The illustration was perfect to fit the image, great job!!🌹
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Thanks Jo, really overwhelmed by your kind remark. It’s spontaneous, and I write it and share with you all kind hearted people.
Always my pleasure to receive your encouraging comments.
Have a great day, best wishes for you always.
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Your spontaneous is spectacular my friend and we are very lucky to have you share it with us. Keep up the great work Aquib!
You too have a pleasant day and best wishes to you too.
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Beautiful poetry.👌👌👌
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Thanks a lot sir. Wishing you all the best and good luck.
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swagat apka
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‘Treaded the roads of desert for the ocean of love…’ I could picture the words as I read and it’s absolutely beautiful!☺
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Thanks yuvi , appreciate it a lot. Glad to hear from you. Best wishes.
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😍
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😊😊, thanks adithya
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Stunning word play.
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Thanks a lot mvs.
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This is beautiful Mashallah!
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Thanks Maryam a lot. 🤗🤗
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Beautiful
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Lovely!
Eid Mubarak.
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Thanks, eid Mubarak to you too.
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Shukriya Aquib.
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Most welcome, (hey may I know your name?)
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Sure why not! I am Punam. 😊
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Thanks Punam, nice to meet you here.
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Same here. Nice to meet you too.
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Wow, this is beautiful!!
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Thanks a lot Nameera glad you liked it.
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Wonderfully penned!❤
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Thanks.
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Absolutely loved it!! You can check my poems too on https://stecydsouza.wordpress.com/
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Thanks Stecy, your name reminded me of a character called Gwen Stency. Nevermind.
Will check your poem asap. Thanks for stopping by.
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so beautiful and quite deep! I just started seriously writing poems and it would be very nice if i received a feedback from such a talented person like you! 🙂
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Thank you for your kind words. I am certainly overwhelmed by this.
It would be my pleasure. Please bear with me. 👍👍😊😊
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Honestly , I’m just trying to improve my poetry to get to your level😭. I am open to learning and receiving any tips , lol anyway please read and like this https://hoityaura.wordpress.com/2018/07/03/vessel-of-apologies/
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It’s all your kindness dear reader. Will sure give you feedbacks. Keep writing.
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Thanks , I’ll try to post as much as possible. Sorry for the late reply.
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Some stood at outskirts,
Thinking ’bout the foolish pace.
Forgetting; time is the master of all Fates.
Awesome lines and stunning piece. Bravo!
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Thanks Eugenia, 👍👍. Have a great day.
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Very heartfelt words, nicely written!
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Thanks a lot @AJCL, really appreciate it. Have a wonderful day.
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Please follow my blog;
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Thanks:)
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DAAAAMN!
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Fantastic words!👍👍
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Thanks buddy. 👍👍
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Loved this
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Thanks Bud, appreciate it a lot. Have a great time ahead
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woww.
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Sad yet so beautiful..
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Thanks for appreciating it. Much humbled.
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I love it ❤
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Thanks Celeste. Much peace and love.
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Love with no fate
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Just amazing. Falling for your poems word-by-word ❤️
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Don’t fall please you might break your legs. 😜😜. My pjs are cliche but I let it out. 😜😜. 💙. Thanks for appreciating it Peace on you.
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You were late. I am already in hospital. *Ouch, don’t touch that bone*
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Aapko na tohra humour me work karna hoga Jaya jee , aapko ten me se – 10 milta hian 😜😜😜
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I want to thank God, my parents and everyone who supported me ….. 😂😂
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Oh my God, you miss little dash on the left of ten dear. 😁
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